I Need Your Help!!!! Part Two

We are now following Alex and Kate who are just about to get out of the corridor. They run out and down the stairs - as they run round the corner they run into Greg and Tina. They each tell about the murderer, and reveal they are the only ones left there, but are happy because now they can go. However Alex and Kate tell Greg and Tina that they have to find the others. They begin looking for them.

We now join Tom, John and Kirsty in the basement. They find a light that works, and turn it on. They find newspaper clippings all over the wall about the closure of Whitecroft. There are all sorts of things, like group photographs and certificates for the �cleanest hospital in England�. They find a clipping that says: �ex patient now star cleaner and caretaker�. They are creeped out by all the memorabilia.

They hear footsteps above them, and promptly turn out the light and hide themselves in a back room. The light is turned on, Bleach enters. He mumbles to himself about how dirty the kids have made the hospital, and how much extra work he will have to do. He potters about, grabbing a spraying can. He then grabs a bottled marked �Highly Corrosive, Industrial Cleaning, Dilute 1000:1 parts water�. He pours it, undiluted into the spraying can.

The kids whisper, they are relieved it is only a worker, but do not want to get caught. Bleach over hears them and heads towards the room, the Kids back off, but Bleach sees them. John steps forward, jokingly holding his hands up and saying �you caught us!!� and laughing. Bleach, not impressed, sprays the spray into Johns face. John screams and holds his eyes, he turns round to Tom and Kirsty who are shocked. As he removes his hands, it is evident that the spray has melted away parts of his face. Tom and Kirsty scream, and Bleach moves closer to the pair. Tom picks up a broom propped up against the wall and swings it at Bleach. It hits Bleach and stuns him � Tom takes a second swing, this time at Bleach�s head. Bleach falls to the ground. Tom pick�s up John who is screaming in agony and they run out of the room, locking the door, keeping Bleach inside.

Greg, Tina, Alex and Kate are in the big hall that John, Kirsty and Tom went through. Kate is being rational, planning ahead, while Tina plays with her hair and Greg and Alex lead with poles as weapons. Greg and Alex motion for them to stop. They hear a sound. It�s a dragging sound. They continue slowly, creeping towards the other exit. They see a silhouette of a guy standing in the doorway. �Who is it� they shout. Tom replies, and they are very relived. That is until they get a bit closer and notice a fourth person behind Kirsty. Its Bleach, they shout, and Kirsty quickly runs, but Bleach hits her on the head with a metal pole. Kirsty, in her fall pushes Bleach down the stairs to the basement.

Alex shout�s to Tom to run over to them, but he doesn�t listen and tries to drag Kirsty and John from harm. Greg runs over to help, but Bleach is on his way back up stairs. He is carrying something heavy. Alex panics and runs over to help drag John over too. Bleach reaches the top of the stairs and raises his weapon above his head. As he does, we can clearly see that it is an axe. He brings it down on Greg�s back. Alex is splattered in blood, and stumbles backwards. He is cornered by Bleach, Tom however stands up behind bleach. �Bet you were devastated when they closed this place down, weren�t you, now look at you. Look at the mess your making.� Bleach turns round. Tom continues �You�ll never get the blood stains to go away�, Bleach starts walking towards Tom. Tom continues with other insults etc. He then shouts to Alex to take Kate and run. Alex hesitates, but runs.

Alex and Kate are frantically running through the corridors. They find the old Rave room, there are dead bodies everywhere. They dodge them and head out to the car. Alex jumps in the driver�s seat, and Kate clambers in the passengers seat. Alex tries to start the car, but it won�t start, he hits it and the engine starts.

They drive to the house that they asked directions from. They park up, and the old lady peers out from behind the curtain again. Alex and Kate run up to the house and bang on the door, the old lady opens the door slightly. They plead to the lady to let them in. She mentions about Greg getting things dirty earlier, but they say they just want to use her phone. She lets them in.

Inside, the old lady shows Alex to a phone, but Kate sits down in the front room. She notices that a bit of paper is wedged under one of the armchairs. She picks it up and opens it, it is a photo of Josh and Hannah together. Scrawled across it is the words �die, whore, bitch, dirty, filth etc.�. She screams and drops the photo. The old lady returns and asks what is the problem. Kate is sat as if nothing happens and denies screaming. She asks where the toilet is. �Upstairs on the left�.

Kate heads upstairs, and turns the bathroom light on, but exists and closes the door. She enters one of the bedrooms. It is completely impersonalised, no photos, posters, just looks like a spare room. She heads over to the window. There is a switch on the wall, she flicks the switch, which turns the outside lights on just in time to see the legs of a body being dragged into a shed like building.

She gasps, and turns around. The old lady is in the doorway. �You took such an awful long time in the bathroom little one, I was worried.� Kate screams �get away from me� and Alex appears behind the old lady. He slams the door against her and she falls to the floor. Kate tells Alex what she just saw and they run downstairs. As they open the front door, Bleach is stood in the way. He hits Alex over the head knocking him out and Kate runs back upstairs. She watches helplessly from the window as Alex is dragged into the shed too. Bleach looks up to the window and points at Kate, then draws his hand across his throat, gesturing that she will be killed.

We see Kate run to the kitchen. She notices the kitchen knifes are missing. She grabs the bin.

Alex has been tied up by his hands, and stripped down to his underwear. He can hear a scraping sound. He twists himself round and can see Kirsty, Tom and Greg all tied up. He also notices too red corpses with the heads of Josh and Hannah, their skin has been scraped off. �got to get clean, got to get clean� Bleach repeats over and over as he scours Kirsty�s skin away. Alex tries to scream stop, but only draws attention to himself. Bleach stops scouring at Kirsty, her head moves, she is still alive. Bleach heads over to Alex. �filthy, filthy�. Bleach grabs a knife from the side and (offscreen) cuts Alex�s penis off. Alex screams in pain. He returns to Kirsty and continues to scour away. At this point, Kate pulls the doors to the shed open. She holds the bin in her hands. �Look, dirty, dirty, the floor is dirty�. She slowly picks litter out of the bin and drops it. Bleach follows, trying to pick up all the rubbish, Kate leads him toward the house. In the house, she as created loads of mess and Bleach falls to his knees trying to clean it all up. Kate grabs a lampshade and hits Bleach. He falls to the floor.

Kate runs back to the shed. She is horrified at the sights. She runs over to Kirsty but she is dead. Tom tells her to check Alex, but he is dead too. She unties Tom, and together they run out of the shed. The old lady is stood pointing a shotgun at Kate. �You bitch. Look what you did to my house�. She shoots two rounds into Kate�s chest, which explode with blood. She falls to the ground. Tom panics and falls to the ground. Kate is dead already. Bleach is crawling out of the doorway, he gasps �mother� and holds out his hand, as if pleading for her. His arm drops as she heads over to him, he is �dead�. The mother reaches Bleach and cradles his head and body. Tom, by this point is in the car, and trying to get it started. It won�t start. The mother, still cradling Bleach, aims the rifle at the car, she shoots, but the chamber is empty. Tom speeds off. The mother is left crying over her child. �He�ll soon be back� she mutters to herself.

RIGHT NOW FOR THE END!!!!!!!!! I've got four possible endings: let me know which one you tink I should go with.

Ending 1: (Tom: The Obsessive Cleaner)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. He notices that there is lots of rubbish in the car, and tries to grab it and throw it out the window. He then removes the ashtray, but spills it all over the car. He does an emergency stop and the car comes to a halt. A LS of the car in the centre as Tom throws rubbish out the car, we can hear him muttering �dirty, dirty, so dirty� as we cut to end credits.

Ending 2: (Bleach Lives on)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. The camera focus�s in on lots of rubbish in the car. Tom looks in his rear view mirror and promptly does an emergency stop and the car comes to a halt. A LS of the car in the centre we can hear Bleach muttering �dirty, dirty, so dirty� we then hear the sound of a knife being drawn and Tom screaming. End Credits.

Ending 3: (Tom Escapes)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. An upbeat song fades in and we see a montage of all the different killings. It ends with Tom driving over a hill out of sight. End Credits.

Ending 4: (Tom Escapes, Bleach Lives)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. An upbeat song fades in and we see a montage of all the different killings. It ends with Tom driving over a hill out of sight. We then see a person walk in front of the camera dragging a big bag behind him �your dirty. Must be cleaned, must be cleaned� � End Credits.




THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR TIME!

[Deposable]

GREAT ! now you ruined the movie for me... thanks a lot...

unfortuneatly, money and distribution matters will most probably prevent you from ever seeing it!! Unless its so amazing that Vipcos wants to put it out! ha, which i doubt very much!

Anyway, what did you think?!

Please give me some feedback (need it for my research folder!)

Thanks for reading though!

[filmmaker2]

Oh my GOD you are so twisted!!

[zwoti]

Originally posted by jasoniw
unfortuneatly, money and distribution matters will most probably prevent you from ever seeing it!! Unless its so amazing that Vipcos wants to put it out! ha, which i doubt very much!

Anyway, what did you think?!

Please give me some feedback (need it for my research folder!)

Thanks for reading though!

vipco........VIPCO :mad:




and is this deja-vu i'm having :confused:

[filmmaker2]

you're remembering that thread...that market research VIPCO thread thinly disguised as a college project...this person seems like another VIPCO-cahooted person...

[MoonLit Meadow]

You want us to READ??? Who reads anymore....get with the times!:p ;)

[RoLLiNLiGhTs]

Originally posted by MoonLit Meadow
You want us to READ??? Who reads anymore....get with the times!:p ;)

...I can't see what you wrote, cause I can't read...:eek: ;) :D

[MoonLit Meadow]

Originally posted by RoLLiNLiGhTs
...I can't see what you wrote, cause I can't read...:eek: ;) :D

Oh...it pretty much just said "RollinLights is a jackass" ;):p

[X¤MurderDoll¤X]

Originally posted by jasoniw
We are now following Alex and Kate who are just about to get out of the corridor. They run out and down the stairs - as they run round the corner they run into Greg and Tina. They each tell about the murderer, and reveal they are the only ones left there, but are happy because now they can go. However Alex and Kate tell Greg and Tina that they have to find the others. They begin looking for them.

We now join Tom, John and Kirsty in the basement. They find a light that works, and turn it on. They find newspaper clippings all over the wall about the closure of Whitecroft. There are all sorts of things, like group photographs and certificates for the �cleanest hospital in England�. They find a clipping that says: �ex patient now star cleaner and caretaker�. They are creeped out by all the memorabilia.

They hear footsteps above them, and promptly turn out the light and hide themselves in a back room. The light is turned on, Bleach enters. He mumbles to himself about how dirty the kids have made the hospital, and how much extra work he will have to do. He potters about, grabbing a spraying can. He then grabs a bottled marked �Highly Corrosive, Industrial Cleaning, Dilute 1000:1 parts water�. He pours it, undiluted into the spraying can.

The kids whisper, they are relieved it is only a worker, but do not want to get caught. Bleach over hears them and heads towards the room, the Kids back off, but Bleach sees them. John steps forward, jokingly holding his hands up and saying �you caught us!!� and laughing. Bleach, not impressed, sprays the spray into Johns face. John screams and holds his eyes, he turns round to Tom and Kirsty who are shocked. As he removes his hands, it is evident that the spray has melted away parts of his face. Tom and Kirsty scream, and Bleach moves closer to the pair. Tom picks up a broom propped up against the wall and swings it at Bleach. It hits Bleach and stuns him � Tom takes a second swing, this time at Bleach�s head. Bleach falls to the ground. Tom pick�s up John who is screaming in agony and they run out of the room, locking the door, keeping Bleach inside.

Greg, Tina, Alex and Kate are in the big hall that John, Kirsty and Tom went through. Kate is being rational, planning ahead, while Tina plays with her hair and Greg and Alex lead with poles as weapons. Greg and Alex motion for them to stop. They hear a sound. It�s a dragging sound. They continue slowly, creeping towards the other exit. They see a silhouette of a guy standing in the doorway. �Who is it� they shout. Tom replies, and they are very relived. That is until they get a bit closer and notice a fourth person behind Kirsty. Its Bleach, they shout, and Kirsty quickly runs, but Bleach hits her on the head with a metal pole. Kirsty, in her fall pushes Bleach down the stairs to the basement.

Alex shout�s to Tom to run over to them, but he doesn�t listen and tries to drag Kirsty and John from harm. Greg runs over to help, but Bleach is on his way back up stairs. He is carrying something heavy. Alex panics and runs over to help drag John over too. Bleach reaches the top of the stairs and raises his weapon above his head. As he does, we can clearly see that it is an axe. He brings it down on Greg�s back. Alex is splattered in blood, and stumbles backwards. He is cornered by Bleach, Tom however stands up behind bleach. �Bet you were devastated when they closed this place down, weren�t you, now look at you. Look at the mess your making.� Bleach turns round. Tom continues �You�ll never get the blood stains to go away�, Bleach starts walking towards Tom. Tom continues with other insults etc. He then shouts to Alex to take Kate and run. Alex hesitates, but runs.

Alex and Kate are frantically running through the corridors. They find the old Rave room, there are dead bodies everywhere. They dodge them and head out to the car. Alex jumps in the driver�s seat, and Kate clambers in the passengers seat. Alex tries to start the car, but it won�t start, he hits it and the engine starts.

They drive to the house that they asked directions from. They park up, and the old lady peers out from behind the curtain again. Alex and Kate run up to the house and bang on the door, the old lady opens the door slightly. They plead to the lady to let them in. She mentions about Greg getting things dirty earlier, but they say they just want to use her phone. She lets them in.

Inside, the old lady shows Alex to a phone, but Kate sits down in the front room. She notices that a bit of paper is wedged under one of the armchairs. She picks it up and opens it, it is a photo of Josh and Hannah together. Scrawled across it is the words �die, whore, bitch, dirty, filth etc.�. She screams and drops the photo. The old lady returns and asks what is the problem. Kate is sat as if nothing happens and denies screaming. She asks where the toilet is. �Upstairs on the left�.

Kate heads upstairs, and turns the bathroom light on, but exists and closes the door. She enters one of the bedrooms. It is completely impersonalised, no photos, posters, just looks like a spare room. She heads over to the window. There is a switch on the wall, she flicks the switch, which turns the outside lights on just in time to see the legs of a body being dragged into a shed like building.

She gasps, and turns around. The old lady is in the doorway. �You took such an awful long time in the bathroom little one, I was worried.� Kate screams �get away from me� and Alex appears behind the old lady. He slams the door against her and she falls to the floor. Kate tells Alex what she just saw and they run downstairs. As they open the front door, Bleach is stood in the way. He hits Alex over the head knocking him out and Kate runs back upstairs. She watches helplessly from the window as Alex is dragged into the shed too. Bleach looks up to the window and points at Kate, then draws his hand across his throat, gesturing that she will be killed.

We see Kate run to the kitchen. She notices the kitchen knifes are missing. She grabs the bin.

Alex has been tied up by his hands, and stripped down to his underwear. He can hear a scraping sound. He twists himself round and can see Kirsty, Tom and Greg all tied up. He also notices too red corpses with the heads of Josh and Hannah, their skin has been scraped off. �got to get clean, got to get clean� Bleach repeats over and over as he scours Kirsty�s skin away. Alex tries to scream stop, but only draws attention to himself. Bleach stops scouring at Kirsty, her head moves, she is still alive. Bleach heads over to Alex. �filthy, filthy�. Bleach grabs a knife from the side and (offscreen) cuts Alex�s penis off. Alex screams in pain. He returns to Kirsty and continues to scour away. At this point, Kate pulls the doors to the shed open. She holds the bin in her hands. �Look, dirty, dirty, the floor is dirty�. She slowly picks litter out of the bin and drops it. Bleach follows, trying to pick up all the rubbish, Kate leads him toward the house. In the house, she as created loads of mess and Bleach falls to his knees trying to clean it all up. Kate grabs a lampshade and hits Bleach. He falls to the floor.

Kate runs back to the shed. She is horrified at the sights. She runs over to Kirsty but she is dead. Tom tells her to check Alex, but he is dead too. She unties Tom, and together they run out of the shed. The old lady is stood pointing a shotgun at Kate. �You bitch. Look what you did to my house�. She shoots two rounds into Kate�s chest, which explode with blood. She falls to the ground. Tom panics and falls to the ground. Kate is dead already. Bleach is crawling out of the doorway, he gasps �mother� and holds out his hand, as if pleading for her. His arm drops as she heads over to him, he is �dead�. The mother reaches Bleach and cradles his head and body. Tom, by this point is in the car, and trying to get it started. It won�t start. The mother, still cradling Bleach, aims the rifle at the car, she shoots, but the chamber is empty. Tom speeds off. The mother is left crying over her child. �He�ll soon be back� she mutters to herself.

RIGHT NOW FOR THE END!!!!!!!!! I've got four possible endings: let me know which one you tink I should go with.

Ending 1: (Tom: The Obsessive Cleaner)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. He notices that there is lots of rubbish in the car, and tries to grab it and throw it out the window. He then removes the ashtray, but spills it all over the car. He does an emergency stop and the car comes to a halt. A LS of the car in the centre as Tom throws rubbish out the car, we can hear him muttering �dirty, dirty, so dirty� as we cut to end credits.

Ending 2: (Bleach Lives on)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. The camera focus�s in on lots of rubbish in the car. Tom looks in his rear view mirror and promptly does an emergency stop and the car comes to a halt. A LS of the car in the centre we can hear Bleach muttering �dirty, dirty, so dirty� we then hear the sound of a knife being drawn and Tom screaming. End Credits.

Ending 3: (Tom Escapes)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. An upbeat song fades in and we see a montage of all the different killings. It ends with Tom driving over a hill out of sight. End Credits.

Ending 4: (Tom Escapes, Bleach Lives)

Inside the car, Tom is crying loads, and driving fast. An upbeat song fades in and we see a montage of all the different killings. It ends with Tom driving over a hill out of sight. We then see a person walk in front of the camera dragging a big bag behind him �your dirty. Must be cleaned, must be cleaned� � End Credits.




THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR TIME!

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