My New Short Film (Under My Bed)

[Serial Filmer]

Any One like short films ? i made this one the other day could u please tell me what i have to add or take away and what i did wrong. its based off a 2 sentence horror story. its only 2 mins i hope you all enjoy i worked hard.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xvDJPolPCkM

I did not want to include any jump scares.

[jazzhole]

i can't see anything. brighten the video. next time use less text and tell the story through the video--visually.

[jrw productions]

I agree with what jazzhole said. I'm very familiar with the "under my bed" 2-sentence story. I filmed a version of it a couple years ago, and rather than using the text of the short story, I changed it to character dialogue. I also changed the under the bed aspect of the story because I thought it would translate better to the screen. Here is my version from 2013 if you want to check it out.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m_6vwI1OxA0