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Incredible! Loved reading it and like Doc said, the characters are being developed brilliantly.
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CHAPTER 13
INT. TWILIGHT CITY, WESTWARD POST, ERIC'S OFFICE - DAY Eric sits at his desk, clearly tired from the previous night. He begins to doze off in his chair when the door slides open and Sydney pokes her head in. SYDNEY Eric, Mr. Downey's here to see you. ERIC of all the luck! And i was having such a great morning! Eric grins at Sydney, pausing for laughter, she sends a smile back his way. SYDNEY Should I send him in? ERIC I guess, I mean, if you want. If you don't you wouldn't get in trouble or anything. Eli Downey bursts in, holding a video tape. ELI You won't believe what we got our hands on! ERIC You're right, I don't believe you, in fact, you shouldn't even waste time trying to convince me! Sydney laughs at the door, Eli looks at her, she silences herself and backs away, closing the door as she exits. ELI It's security footage from the break-in at the Blake City Asylum! Eric suddenly seems shocked, he glares at the tape, then back at Eli. ERIC Wh- What exactly is it proof of? ELI The supernatural! ERIC (bewildered) Supernatural? MOMENTS LATER: A TV and VCR have been wheeled into Eric's office, he and Eli watch the footage, it's just footage of an empty hallway. When suddenly Wayne in his white costume suddenly appears in-frame then vanishes in one split second. Eli smiles at this while Eli points repeatedly at the screen. ELI Did you see it? ERIC No, what are you talking about. ELI A ghost! The asylum is haunted! Yesterday some inmate died and drove one of the orderlies insane. He's hiding somewhere in the building. I'll bet you this is the ghost of that inmate! ERIC Or a certain someone forgot to take their medication this morning? ELI We have to run this! ERIC We're not going to run a story about a ghost in an insane asylum. That's a terrible idea. ELI Why is it a terrible idea? ERIC Well, for one, it's ridiculous. Two, it's stupid. Three, it would make the ghost nuts swarm to the asylum like flies to, well, you in your sleep. ELI Why would that be our problem? ERIC Because I don't want to be responsible for dozens of camera-toting crazies mingling with a bunch of knife-toting crazies. Now get out of my office and leave the tape. Eli, speechless, leaves the office. Eric reaches into his pocket and pulls out his phone. He dials a number and as soon as he puts it to his ear he begins talking. ERIC (into phone) Wayne. You'll never guess what was just shown to me! Get over here. MOMENTS LATER: Sydney lets Wayne in, Wayne's wearing a suit and tie. Sydney returns to her desk. ERIC Why the suit? WAYNE I didn't want to look suspicious or anything. ERIC Suspicious of what? Your income? WAYNE No. I just thought it would look strange, somebody not dressed like a tool coming into your office. ERIC Oh, you're clever, Mr. Lucas. WAYNE Guess I've spent too much time with you, Mr. Westward. So what am I looking at? Eric sets up the VCR. Wayne crosses his arms, waiting. WAYNE You can just tell me. ERIC If I could I would have. Eric starts the video, he and Wayne sit on the desk and watch the video. WAYNE After all of the news vans rushing to crime scenes and amateurs with camcorders a mounted security camera finally captured The Blur. ERIC Not according to the people who have seen it. Your choice of wardrobe has lead them to believe that you're a ghost. WAYNE Well, I did have a hole blown in my chest yesterday. It's possible. ERIC You did? Eli bursts in, out of breath from running to Eric's office. He completely ignores Wayne. ELI I got another Asylum story! ERIC Tupac works in the kitchen!? WAYNE Does Bigfoot empty the bedpans? Eli gives Wayne an "I just met you and I already hate you" look. Then proceeds to tell Eric the story. ELI No, the guy they caught last night, the one that broke in, he knocked out the cops and stole the squad car.- Eric and Wayne both freeze up. ELI (Cont'd.) They found the cops hand cuffed around a tree this morning. Both of their noses were broken. The car was abandoned in a field about a mile up the road. ERIC ... Run it... Eli leaves, Eric and Wayne exchange a look of terror. |
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Kickass chapter, Mass. Keep going, bud!
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Wow. That was crap!
:p For a second there you thought I meant it. Brilliant as always. First thread I check (when you get around to posting in it)
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Its coming along really well, MM. Enjoying this alot.
I reckon Red Dynamo could have Renegade though, he'd just electrocute the MoFo and use his charred remains as a bbq
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Getting better and better MM! :D
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btw, welcome back. Good to see you around. :)
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Thats alright, RD likes the cold! Quote:
Cheers mate. I deliberately took a break which was slightly longer than I intended. Time flies driving trains there and back again.
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