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01-27-2004, 06:59 AM
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A litle bit of self promotion
I've never really been one to pimp myself too much, but i figured i'd link over to a little horror piece i wrote when i was 19 and see what everyone thinks. This is actually the first short story i ever finished.
Bearwood Give me you opinions. If you are obviously being a jerk i will just ignore you, so say what you feel.
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01-27-2004, 08:01 AM
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very good dude, I enjoyed it
only thing that bothered me was that you talked about a bear that killed those people years ago, it would have been more misterious if you just said they were killed brutaly or something but hey, it's still a very cool story keep em writing, I got your site in my favs
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01-27-2004, 10:36 AM
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Sweet! Thanks..
Especially for the criticism. I've been writing for a while with little feedback. We'llsee how that pans out in the next rev. :) Oh yeah, i was reading a lot of Dean Koontz when it was written, so I had a tendancy to overexplain.
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01-27-2004, 12:14 PM
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that definatlly wasn't a problem dude, all writers do it, it's cool
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