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Originally Posted by Doc Faustus
A little bit clunky. "reversing his slumping career and juggling his promiscuous lovelife" doesn't quite flow.
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Any suggestions on how to clean it up while keeping the meaning?
Maybe "...rebounding his career and maintaining his promiscuous lovelife."
I have rewritten this thing probably 30 times now. You should have seen how clunky it was to begin with. :(