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Just FYI for everyone that gave their input, I have posted the 2nd draft of the 1st scene over in the other thread for anyone that's interested in seeing how much their contributions have already factored in.
In the revamped version, I made the mother meeker and less confrontational, elimated approx. 50% of the swearing, gave some added girth to the second half of the scene and also put in the ending suggested by Zero.
Let me know what you think of the modifications if you don't mind. Thanks.
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