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Old 12-31-2005, 09:16 AM
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Originally posted by wood_elf_pansy
Actually, that poem was a metaphor for how life is. You go through life and shit happens that you don't expect then you die. It was actually kinda written to my friend. The ending is about death, kinda like at least they got to say good-bye.
OK, but my point is when you're writing a poem with a message as powerful as that, you shouldn't have to settle for awkward wording just to fit a rhyme scheme... maybe go for a free form poem.
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