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Old 07-27-2004, 10:26 AM
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Just read the edited part. Very nice. Very nice indeed. Congragulations. But you may want to not talk like that. Saying "I" instead of "He" or "hisname" isn't normaly how it is written in a book. Or, at least, not any book I've read. It makes it sound like a Journal.
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