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Hey man
There were alot of things that I really liked from this short.
- The acting was pretty good
- The setting (that trail looks like a great place)
- I dug the color tint you put on it
The major thing that stuck out to me was the run time. It seemed that out of the 10 minutes most of it was the character(s) either running or walking. Which took alot away from the ending as well as the kill. I really dug the ending, and wanted to see what was in that box..so that was extremely well done. But the build up it took to get there was just too long. I feel this could have been alot better if it was in the 3-4 minute mark.
Also the soundtrack kind of got repetitive since it seemed like it was the same tune with what sounded like a heartbeat for the majority of the time. Spice it up with the mix!
What I would have done, and take a look at my shorts and see that I'm no professional, would be to cut out the house all together, alot of the running/searching scenes, mix up the sound, and do more with the kill.
Those are my 2 cents. I look forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future
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